Jenna Dorshay t’Reve isn’t your typical farmer’s daughter. Blessed
with plant magic, she’s been impatiently waiting to take her place as Summer
Avatar of Challen. All she and her sister Season Avatars have to do is tame a
Chaos Season, a magical weather storm sent to Challen by a wrathful
demigoddess. They’ve done this many times in other lives, but now strange
plants resistant to Jenna’s magic make Chaos Season worse. Even the assistance
of the War Avatar, father of Jenna’s child, may not be enough to stop the plants.
Before Jenna can conquer the deathbushes and tame Chaos Season, she must fully link
with the other three Avatars in her quartet, but to do so means revealing a
secret that can tear them apart.
Does it pique your interest? Do you have any suggestions for wording changes? Please let me know in the comments.
6 comments:
I'd get rid of the farmer's daughter part. It gets me thinking of something inappropriate.
Good so far. I'd condense the backstory and exposition a little.
Jenna can be inappropriate, Pat, but I'll keep that in mind.
Thanks for your suggestion, Alex!
Not sure if you need "other three" when you have "quartet". Seems a bit redundant.
I think it reads fine. The only word I would change is 'strange'. It sounds too general in meaning. Maybe something more precise like: mutant or abnormal. Something to allude to something otherworldly.
Thanks for pointing that out, Jennifer.
Thanks for the suggestion, Maria!
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