tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post4788403187222934515..comments2024-03-07T19:11:21.715-06:00Comments on Sandra Ulbrich Almazan: Speculative Fiction Author: First 250 Words BlogfestSandra Ulbrich Almazanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15365908651235829765noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-63312567884788744472010-10-18T18:27:34.119-05:002010-10-18T18:27:34.119-05:00I love the opening line.
Agree that his mentionin...I love the opening line.<br /><br />Agree that his mentioning an upcoming scene when his sister's there about a family emergency comes off as callous, but maybe that's your intent?<br /><br />Thanks for sharing!kathrynjankowskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16708011523767228663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-42971354817583917332010-10-18T18:13:08.873-05:002010-10-18T18:13:08.873-05:00You definitely have me curious to know what happen...You definitely have me curious to know what happens. And I love the space references . . . you blend them in so naturally. Got that's its sci-fi without having it slammed down my throat. Good beginning!Janet Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12688012956157161889noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-34048846147875087042010-10-18T09:10:15.456-05:002010-10-18T09:10:15.456-05:00That's an amazing opening. So much drama. I lo...That's an amazing opening. So much drama. I love the fact that even though it's fantasy, it didn't read that way.<br /><br />CDAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12160669603997465454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-18528824041727895132010-10-17T07:27:39.021-05:002010-10-17T07:27:39.021-05:00Thanks to everyone for your comments. I'll hav...Thanks to everyone for your comments. I'll have to think about whether it's worth keeping the itching. (It does get explained later, but perhaps it's too late by then.)<br /><br />This weekend has been very busy for me, so I haven't had time to visit the other people participating in this blogfest. I promise to change that either tonight or tomorrow.Sandra Ulbrich Almazanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15365908651235829765noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-87695682855711180482010-10-17T02:55:46.484-05:002010-10-17T02:55:46.484-05:00Really enjoyed this, and you've balanced so ni...Really enjoyed this, and you've balanced so nicely the sci-fi world-building vs jumping into the action. I'd probably agree about the itching. The other thing I wonder about is his comment that he needs to get back before his next line, when it's fairly obvious there's some family emergency. He comes across as a bit uncaring (though that may be your intention). Would love to read more.<br /><br />RachRachael Harriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16764930101064527321noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-14077605283668693592010-10-16T22:01:08.241-05:002010-10-16T22:01:08.241-05:00this definitely is intriguing and I would turn the...this definitely is intriguing and I would turn the page. I want to know what happens next. Great post1 :DBrenda Drakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01263237745979525170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-77696438381444872732010-10-16T21:08:21.222-05:002010-10-16T21:08:21.222-05:00Oh, this wet my appetite for more. Thanks for shar...Oh, this wet my appetite for more. Thanks for sharing the links to the participating blogfest 250 words. I can't wait to hop around.LM Prestonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16624508396760965680noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-34277548302135288362010-10-16T13:58:28.306-05:002010-10-16T13:58:28.306-05:00I want more! Just that, really, more! :)I want more! Just that, really, more! :)Mariekehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16383960692054256957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-54727653634891914142010-10-16T13:47:41.446-05:002010-10-16T13:47:41.446-05:00This is a nice start. I, too, didn't quite ge...This is a nice start. I, too, didn't quite get itching. It wasn't a feeling I could relate to.Wendy Tyler Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10841984342368861282noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-29442300345840813842010-10-16T13:27:17.557-05:002010-10-16T13:27:17.557-05:00Great setting and great hook with the Mom. Nice! ...Great setting and great hook with the Mom. Nice! :)DL Curranhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11386303187160819147noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-40768481207369689262010-10-16T12:39:52.797-05:002010-10-16T12:39:52.797-05:00Hi,
Fast-paced action and Wam, bad news! Good hoo...Hi,<br /><br />Fast-paced action and Wam, bad news! Good hook! ;)<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-23187516542224894602010-10-16T12:27:06.472-05:002010-10-16T12:27:06.472-05:00Loved your opening line. Nice to see a male POV he...Loved your opening line. Nice to see a male POV here. Thanks for sharing!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09687047513163296827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-81321608844282243002010-10-16T12:14:03.171-05:002010-10-16T12:14:03.171-05:00Great scene! I loved the tension and feel of it. ...Great scene! I loved the tension and feel of it. Sci-fi can be tricky to master, but your writing seems very suited to it, like it's a comfortable genre for you. <br /><br />My one critique - 'A spasm of itching...' For some reason, it sounded off to me, but that's just my humble opinion!<br /><br />I really enjoyed it and you've left me wanting more!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-78963865227419410972010-10-16T12:04:25.849-05:002010-10-16T12:04:25.849-05:00Interesting setting! I'm curious about the cha...Interesting setting! I'm curious about the characters, as well. I like that you didn't dump us immediately into the "mom's in the hospital" moment, but gave a little time to get a feel for the characters and setting. Good job!Shalleehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09907680428735740943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-59002568525423436662010-10-16T10:16:57.404-05:002010-10-16T10:16:57.404-05:00Very curious indeed! we get a little taste, then B...Very curious indeed! we get a little taste, then BAM you hit us with a good hook! nicely doneSummer Rosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08122694893668693244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-75778272803383187512010-10-16T07:33:11.786-05:002010-10-16T07:33:11.786-05:00Intriguing! I like the setting you describe.Intriguing! I like the setting you describe.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-18714294.post-854062012257473782010-10-16T06:00:59.726-05:002010-10-16T06:00:59.726-05:00Now I'm curious to know what happens next! I l...Now I'm curious to know what happens next! I loved reading your excerpt. :)Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.com